Tuesday, June 18, 2013

Cat's Eye Chapter 5: A Deadly Perfume

We return with another chapter....Toshio has a new partner, and she's mighty suspicious of Hitomi! In other words, she's a better detective than Toshio.Will Cat's Eye keep their identity and pull off their new heist successfully? Read on!

Chapter 5!

3 comments:

  1. I was definitely under the weather when I did this... as I read it now, there are certainly quite a few things which I could've worded out better.

    "flirting with" (needless to say I forgot to erase 'to')--could have been 'chasing skirts'...

    "smell of" --should have been 'reek of'...

    "as I was touching" --should have been 'as I held her (down)' or 'as I was holding her (down)'...

    believe me, if I wanted to make a joke out of it-- I would have gone w/ 'felt/feeling her up' instead of the obviously plain/du(H)ll 'touching'...

    "It's a problem for sure" -- should be 'we have our work cut out for us'...

    ...and so forth; etc etc...

    Well, the bottom line is-- I'm really picky w/ my words. And just in case you're wondering, Wright esp, I'm only listing a few of them here to remind me later on when I redo them along w/ the entire first volume. And just so you know, I'm already working on the next and last chapter of this volume. Hopefully I can do this one (chapter) better, otherwise I'll have to set up another appointment w/ a doctor...

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